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dragonyphoenix ([personal profile] dragonyphoenix) wrote2014-01-26 05:35 pm
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Poem: What the Oracle Didn't Tell You

It's been a while since I've written haiku but I remember that it's supposed to have an image or two and that it's supposed to be ambiguous so the reader can put his/her own interpretation onto it.

"What the Oracle Didn't Tell You"

The fruit
that is never plucked
rots on the vine.

[identity profile] velvetwhip.livejournal.com 2014-01-26 10:55 pm (UTC)(link)
Nice haiku.


Gabrielle

[identity profile] dragonyphoenix.livejournal.com 2014-01-27 01:05 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks. It's been so long since I've written one, I wasn't sure I remembered how.

[identity profile] velvetwhip.livejournal.com 2014-01-27 01:24 am (UTC)(link)
It's not classic in terms of syllable count, but the modernist approach doesn't demand that anyway. I liked it!


Gabrielle

[identity profile] dragonyphoenix.livejournal.com 2014-01-27 01:38 am (UTC)(link)
The Japanese language is more conducive to writing with the classic syllable count so I don't even try for that.

Thanks, I'm so glad you like it.
Edited 2014-01-27 01:39 (UTC)

[identity profile] velvetwhip.livejournal.com 2014-01-27 01:49 am (UTC)(link)
I sure did. I think it's beautiful and elegant.


Gabrielle

[identity profile] dragonyphoenix.livejournal.com 2014-01-27 02:01 am (UTC)(link)
Awww, thanks. That's so sweet.