Scene rewrite from The Bloom on the Rose

Note: This is a writing exercise: Take any passage you have written in the first person and recast it in the objective voice.  Try to reveal the thoughts and feelings of the original through speech, gesture, action, and image.
Story I Used: The Bloom on the Rose.  If you are interested in seeing the scene I rewrote, follow the link and search on Drusilla’s at me again.
Fandom: BtVS
Characters/Pairing: Mainly Angelus and Willow but a bit of Drusilla and Spike as well.
Rating: NC-17
Concrit: Please, in comments
Disclaimer: They aren't mine, not yet, but the will be once I've taken over the world. Bwah-ha-ha.
Summary: Angelus manipulating Willow
Note: Jessa's tattoo is a combination of a tattoo I saw on the Metro and my imagination.


( The rewritten scene )